為什么我要寫一篇關于PS的文章
是因為
今天無意之中
翻到了曾經(jīng)申請大學時的PS
臥槽
那叫一個矯情
那叫一個絞盡腦汁班門弄斧
洋洋灑灑一千多字
沒看到一半
我整個人已實力懵逼
所以
現(xiàn)在想想看，特么的我當初到底是怎么被錄取上的
無限心疼審閱我PS的admission老師
不說了，跪一個先!!!
帶你們感受一下，我和我曾經(jīng)找過的中介合作下的妖孽畫風。這是第一段。
Creativity， tenacity，inspiration ，and passion are the four pillars of my life ,which ,I suppose, will be the very ones leading to my success. With passion so prevailing ,I preserve in it ;With passion so overwhelming,I fight for it .As our great leader Chairman Mao put it and I paraphrased it ,on the way where your passion takes you , if you fail ,you’ve got to try again and prepare yourself in any way possible and strive for the ultimate triumph. This is how I try to live the best life I can no matter how life baffles and frustrates me.
臥槽，讀完之后，我尷尬癌晚期了好嘛!!!
真特么覺得自己是智障
我這特么都寫了些什么當年就這么遞交上去了
完全不知所云，刻意遣詞造句，boring級別max，
寶寶心里苦啊，寶寶尬點被戳穿了，寶寶受不了這尬點喚醒的身體內(nèi)的洪荒之力，
寶寶憋不住了，寶寶一定要說了!!!
第一段一共也就四句話，還特么全部是廢話。
創(chuàng)意韌性靈感激情是我人生的四大支柱
因為內(nèi)心的激情滿的要溢出來了，所以我堅持并奮斗著
不忍直視的是，我還動用了我們的毛爺爺(先跪一個)!!!
關鍵是，這翻譯水平，我也是完全想不起來是引用的毛爺爺哪句經(jīng)典語錄了!!!
最后以一句‘不管人生遇到怎樣的挫折，我就是秉承這樣的信念在努力過好這一生’結束第一段。
臥槽，翻譯成中文之后我更想抽死我自己了。
這么多廢話，特么關你申請這所學校這個課程有半毛錢關系?
好吧，其實愛說廢話的也不僅僅只有曾經(jīng)年幼無知的小編一人，你們大多也有這個通病。
華威大學admission老師口中最忌諱的PS模板
之前機緣巧合碰到過華威大學的一個admission老師，然后就聊到了中國學生申請中的個人陳述PS這一環(huán)，聊到這里的時候老師的聲調(diào)明顯比之前高了，呵呵，眉毛都翹了一翹。
他說，‘我不知道其他學校是不是這樣，我們?nèi)A威大學貌似收到的來自中國申請者的PS 都很大程度上呈現(xiàn)出模式化的問題’。
總結下來，基本是這樣。
第一段，介紹自己小時候的生長環(huán)境是怎么樣的，我爸爸媽媽做的是什么工作，對我有啥幫助(學校內(nèi)心OS：你小時候哪兒長大的，爸媽干啥的跟我們學校有啥關系?)
第二段，我在學校的成績有多好多好，學過哪些課程(學校OS：你成績怎么樣，學了哪些課，我們在你遞交的成績單上度能看到吶，你應該跟我們說你學的東西以及你擅長的科目跟你今后的研究方向或者說未來想要學的課程和你未來規(guī)劃的方向有什么關聯(lián)?有哪些助力?又有哪些gap?)
PS：這個Gap指的就是你目前的知識跟你未來想學的東西之間還有哪些問題，或者很難解決的問題，或者之前從沒想過的問題存在?比如，我現(xiàn)在學的是物流，我想要學酒店管理，那么怎么樣在物流和酒店管理之間找到聯(lián)系?比如酒店新鮮事物的冷鏈運輸，或者是客房物品的采購著一些?
第三段， 我在學校參加過XXX社團，XXX活動(學校OS：跟你將來想來我們學校以及學的東西有啥關聯(lián)?)
第四段， 我好好好愛英國，也好愛好愛你們學校(學校OS：……我們知道你們愛我們很愛英國……你跟人家也是那么說的吧……)
當時聊完的時候，也是實力尷尬，因為我記得在我PS的最后一段，就是寫得我多么多么愛英國，多么多么想去你們學校!!!
呵呵呵呵呵呵呵呵
從外網(wǎng)扒了兩篇Examples of Successful Statements，你們感受下。
Statement #1
My interest in science dates back to my years in high school, where I excelled in physics, chemistry, and math. When I was a senior, I took a first-year calculus course at a local college (such anadvanced-level class was not available in high school) and earned an A. It seemed only logical that I pursue a career in electrical engineering.
When I began my undergraduate career, I had the opportunity to be exposed to the full range of engineering courses, all of which tended to reinforce and solidify my intense interest in engineering. I'vealso had the opportunity to study a number of subjects in the humanities andthey have been both enjoyable and enlightening, providing me with a new anddifferent perspective on the world in which we live.
In the realm of engineering, I have developed a special interest in the field of laser technology and have evenbeen taking a graduate course in quantum electronics. Among the 25 or sostudents in the course, I am the sole undergraduate. Another particular interest of mine is electromagnetics, and last summer, when I was a technical assistant at a world-famous local lab, I learned about its many practical applications, especially in relation to microstrip and antenna design.Management at this lab was sufficiently impressed with my work to ask that Ireturn when I graduate. Of course, my plans following completion of my current studies are to move directly into graduate work toward my master's in science.After I earn my master's degree, I intend to start work on my Ph.D. inelectrical engineering. Later I would like to work in the area of research anddevelopment for private industry. It is in R & D that I believe I can makethe greatest contribution, utilizing my theoretical background and creativityas a scientist.
I am highly aware of the superb reputation of your school, and my conversations with several of your alumni have served to deepen my interest in attending. I know that, in addition to your excellent faculty, your computer facilities are among the best in the state. I hope you will give me the privilege of continuing my studies at your fine institution.
全文一共四段，一共368個字
第一段講我會選擇電氣工程的簡單粗暴的邏輯關系，一個是因為興趣，一個是因為擅長。
第二段寫興趣和實力的加深，其實一步一步都是在講，我為什么會選擇這個領域這個項目。
第三段指出了自己想要研究的方向，以及為此，我現(xiàn)在所作出的努力，學業(yè)和職業(yè)規(guī)劃。
最后一段，為什么我會選擇你們學校和你們的項目。一環(huán)扣一環(huán)，條理清晰，表達順暢，將自己的故事用最樸實的文字寫出來，有自夸，但恰到好處，不矯情，也沒煽情。
Statement #2
Having majored in literary studies (world literature) as an undergraduate, I would now like to concentrate on English andAmerican literature.
I am especially interested in nineteenth-century literature, women's literature, Anglo-Saxon poetry, and folk lore and folk literature. My personal literary projects have involved some combination of these subjects. For the oral section of my comprehensive exams,I specialized in nineteenth century novels by and about women. The relationship between "high" and folk literature became the subject for my honors essay, which examined Toni Morrison's use of classical, biblical, African, andAfro-American folk tradition in her novel. I plan to work further on this essay, treating Morrison's other novels and perhaps preparing a paper suitable for publication.
In my studies toward a doctoral degree, I hope to examine more closely the relationship between high and folk literature.My junior year and private studies of Anglo-Saxon language and literature havecaused me to consider the question of where the divisions between folklore,folk literature, and high literature lie. Should I attend your school, I wouldlike to resume my studies of Anglo-Saxon poetry, with special attention to itsfolk elements.
Writing poetry also figures prominently in my academic and professional goals. I have just begun submitting to the smaller journals with some success and am gradually building a working manuscript for acollection. The dominant theme of this collection relies on poems that draw from classical, biblical, and folk traditions, as well as everyday experience,in order to celebrate the process of giving and taking life, whether literal or figurative. My poetry draws from and influences my academic studies. Much of what I read and study finds a place in my creative work as subject. At the sametime, I study the art of literature by taking part in the creative process,experimenting with the tools used by other authors in the past.
In terms of a career, I see myself teaching literature, writing criticism, and going into editing or publishing poetry.Doctoral studies would be valuable to me in several ways. First, your teachingassistant ship program would provide me with the practical teaching experienceI am eager to acquire. Further, earning a Ph.D. in English and Americanliterature would advance my other two career goals by adding to my skills, bothcritical and creative, in working with language. Ultimately, however, I see the Ph.D. as an end in itself, as well as a professional stepping stone; I enjoy studying literature for its own sake and would like to continue my studies on the level demanded by the Ph.D. program.
全文5段，429個字，也是沒超過500
第一段相對更為簡單粗暴，我就是想申請英語語言和美國文化。
第二段為什么想申請這個專業(yè)，因為我感興趣，然后用具體的實例闡述清楚自己感興趣的點。第三段明確想要研究的方向。
第四段講為什么會選擇這個研究方向，和我學業(yè)職業(yè)規(guī)劃的關聯(lián)，以及我現(xiàn)在正在做的。
第五段講職業(yè)規(guī)劃及為什么要申請這個博士項目。
也是句句都在點子上，圍繞著‘為什么我會選擇這個項目’，沒寫半句廢話。
牛津大學的個人陳述要求也很明確，PS的核心應該是為什么你覺得這個課程適合你，而不是寫你的個人成就，和無關的一些興趣和抱負：
申請這個課程的原因
實例證明你想研究這個領域的動機以及你對這個領域的理解
提出合理論證的能力
除了最基本的入學要求，你還能為這個項目做什么貢獻(也就是為什么我們要選擇你)
是否具有抗強壓學習工作的能力
推理能力
和快速汲取抽象新概念的能力
KCL的官網(wǎng)直接限制了 PS數(shù)字，500字左右，為什么你要選擇讀這個碩士項目，讀完之后的規(guī)劃和你與這個課程相關的經(jīng)歷經(jīng)驗。
關于PS字數(shù)，真心覺得500字封頂了，特別是申請高峰期的時候，你覺得他們會有耐心
一個字一個字的讀完?
呵呵呵呵呵
最后，
一定不要說廢話，
一定不要為了寫長句而寫長句，
一定不要為了煽情而煽情，
就簡簡單單陳述自己的故事就好~~~
能打動人的，永遠是真實的故事，而不是浮夸的文字。
